I don’t like the use of commas to signify pauses. Commas are better for grammatical structure in my opinion. Better to use an ellipsis (…), or an em dash (—). My two cents.
I used both of those elements often, when I feel they express whatever I’ve trying to say. I wanted a slight pause between the two clauses, and felt the comma did that better that your suggestions, which indicate longer pauses.
It’s not “grammatically incorrect,” it’s just one alternative approach.
It was a deliberate choice. I like the pause.
I don’t like the use of commas to signify pauses. Commas are better for grammatical structure in my opinion. Better to use an ellipsis (…), or an em dash (—). My two cents.
How do you feel about semicolons
I used both of those elements often, when I feel they express whatever I’ve trying to say. I wanted a slight pause between the two clauses, and felt the comma did that better that your suggestions, which indicate longer pauses.
It’s not “grammatically incorrect,” it’s just one alternative approach.